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Free高考英語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)第一節(jié)課

題型綜述----續(xù)寫(xiě)

續(xù)寫(xiě)本質(zhì)就是寫(xiě)故事

成就故事的關(guān)鍵

（發(fā)現(xiàn)自己是哪個(gè)方面比較不足）

1故事技能

2文學(xué)技能

故事的六要素：結(jié)構(gòu) 事件 場(chǎng)景 節(jié)奏 順序 幕

故事體現(xiàn)價(jià)值

Continuation

ACT1(1-2段)背景 價(jià)值

ACT 2 特定事件 主要人物

ACT 3 價(jià)值 提出解決方案

第二節(jié)課

思路第一 之后再考慮高級(jí)用語(yǔ)

價(jià)值：幫助他人

人物：母親、三個(gè)孩子、幫助對(duì)象Bernard

線索：make popcorns掙錢(qián)

續(xù)寫(xiě)要求：

1.動(dòng)作盡可能的細(xì)致-拆解動(dòng)作

2.加入適當(dāng)?shù)膬?nèi)容補(bǔ)充——介詞短語(yǔ)、副詞、形容詞

3.加入適當(dāng)?shù)娜宋镄睦砘顒?dòng) (加在主角身上)——復(fù)雜心理 正反兩面

e.g 在開(kāi)心的時(shí)候還會(huì)有其他感受

4.使用人物直接話語(yǔ)——避免對(duì)話（因?yàn)閷?duì)話的格式不好寫(xiě)）

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母親贊同——開(kāi)始做

場(chǎng)景：制作爆米花——在家/廚房 室內(nèi)

節(jié)奏：母親在干什么？Clara/Harry/John在干什么？分工

順序：在……之前、在……之后、同時(shí)（就三個(gè)）

兩個(gè)動(dòng)作同時(shí) doing sth,sb did sth 一個(gè)人

兩個(gè)動(dòng)作先后 having done sth，sb did sth 一個(gè)人

所以他們就開(kāi)始做了。

Clara負(fù)責(zé)準(zhǔn)備corns，同時(shí)Harry負(fù)責(zé)準(zhǔn)備paper bags，John負(fù)責(zé)邀請(qǐng)Bernard

聽(tīng)了這個(gè)想法，Bernard很感動(dòng)，但是他有些不自信，因?yàn)樗麖膩?lái)沒(méi)有做過(guò)類似的事情，“我們一起肯定沒(méi)問(wèn)題”，John說(shuō)服了他

在母親的幫助下，四個(gè)孩子一起做好了爆米花

So their preparation started immediately.

（注意：寫(xiě)sth. start ，不寫(xiě)they start）

Clara brought the box of corns from the kitchen,while Harry offered to buy some paper bags from the nearby grocery.(Harry offered to find some white papaer and make bags for the popcorn)

In the meantime,John went to Bernard's house and invited him to join in.

Hearing this idea,Bernard was quite grateful,but little nervous，for he had never done such things before .

"We can make it together!"John persuaded him.

（后面一定會(huì)賣出去，所以如果前面寫(xiě)他懷疑賣不賣的出去就有了情節(jié)的小起伏）

That mornign,with the guidance and encouragement of Meredith,the four kids managed to make delicious popcorn

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伯納德開(kāi)始賣爆米花

場(chǎng)景：賣爆米花——街上 室外

Followed by the other ikds,he walked along the street,holding a sigh reading "Popcorn for $1".People were curious at first.After learning the situation,they all took out their wallet and bought one sharp to support Beranrd.In a short while,the popcorn was sold out.Bernard was so touched that tears welled up in his eyes.He expressed heartfelt thanks to Meredith and her children.Ths was a special day for everyone,for they learned that even in the hardest time,there was hope if we helped each other. 價(jià)值 中心主題

段落結(jié)尾：1.動(dòng)作結(jié)果 我們完成了清潔工作

2.自身感受 雖然工作很辛苦，但是每個(gè)人都很投入

3.他人評(píng)價(jià) 我們的工作得到了路人的一致贊賞

4.中心主題：我們明白了勞動(dòng)的價(jià)值（僅限文章結(jié)尾）

第三節(jié)課

2021年武漢四調(diào)續(xù)寫(xiě)

Walking across campus with every pair of eyes on you can be embarrassing, especially when you’re 13 years old. I looked around me in desperate?search of a friendly face, a smile, anything. I was quite disappointed, to say the least. And I, in turn, felt somewhat foolish, walking across campus with a false?smile?on my face. I was simply attempting to follow the advice my mother had given me years before: when things get awkward, smile.?No matter where you are, a smile?will always be understood. A smile is universal. At that very moment, however, I felt my mother’s advice didn’t work. 負(fù)

1?作者在校園里負(fù)態(tài)度 —— 文章表面

2?母親的建議無(wú)效到有效的轉(zhuǎn)變 —— 文章預(yù)判

3?文章重要線索：微笑 ——?文章內(nèi)在

On top of it all, my mind was racing with questions and concerns?typical of any 13-year-old on the first day of school: where would I sit at lunch? Who would I talk to? Not to mention, how would I make friends when I didn’t even speak the language? My heartbeat quickened, and I felt nervous. Still, I did my best to maintain calm so as not to let my guard down and reveal to others just how scared I truly was. 負(fù)

作者身份：13歲美國(guó)女孩轉(zhuǎn)學(xué)到中國(guó)校園里的第一天

When the teacher introduced me to the class as the “American girl”, 10 sets of hands immediately shot up. Some students had questions, others wanted to practice their English with me. Because I didn’t speak much Chinese yet, I communicated with the other students through hand motions mixed in with broken English and Chinese. Despite the attention, I wasn’t sure how much of it was positive. It was almost as if they weren’t sure what to make of me and I was being examined. Then again, who could blame them? After all, I was the first American ever to attend the school.?So essentially, we were all first timers.?負(fù)

Then came the first class – Chinese painting. 負(fù)

1?作者遇到問(wèn)題 — 尷尬 — 與前文有關(guān)

2?為什么會(huì)出現(xiàn)這種問(wèn)題 — 與前文有關(guān)

3?遇到問(wèn)題時(shí)作者有什么感受和心理活動(dòng)

To?tell the truth, I made every last bit of effort?to catch up with the teacher’s words, but still couldn’t understand what he was instructing at all. Then all the students were required to finish a piece of work on their own. Seeing?those strange drawing tools and the blank paper on the desk, I felt?really stressed because I had no idea where to start, also?afraid of others laughing at my weakness.

As I burnt with great embarrassment, Li Hua, who was next to me, gave me a warm smile. 負(fù)—正

1?作者的問(wèn)題解決 — 有人相助

2?怎么解決的問(wèn)題 — 別人教會(huì)你怎么做（系列動(dòng)作）

3?解決問(wèn)題之后作者有什么感受和心理活動(dòng) — 爽

4?文章結(jié)尾突出中心 — 微笑

第四節(jié)課

2021年福建質(zhì)檢續(xù)寫(xiě)

When my daughters reached the third and fourth grades, I occasionally allowed them to walk to and from school alone if the weather permitted. One warm spring day, a little dog followed them home after school. It had short legs and long lovely ears, with a fawn-colored coat. It was the cutest dog I had ever seen and the girls begged me to keep it.

作者的女兒撿到了一條可愛(ài)的小狗

The dog was barely twelve weeks old. It had no collar or identifying marks of any sort. I didn’t know what to do. I thought about?running an advertisement in the lost-and-found but I really didn’t want to. It would break the kids’ hearts if someone should show up. Besides, its owners should have watched it more closely. 作者心理活動(dòng)：不想把狗還回去

By the end of the week the dog was part of our family. It was very intelligent and good with the girls. The following week something?told me to check the lost-and-found section in the local paper.?One particular advertisement jumped out at me and my heart pounded with fear?at what I read. Someone was begging for the return of a lost dog in the neighborhood of our grade school. They sounded desperate. My hand shook.?I couldn’t bring myself to pick up the phone.?

作者心理活動(dòng)：內(nèi)心不安，看到找狗，更加不安

Instead, I pretended I hadn’t seen the advertisement.?I quickly put the paper away in the drawer?and continued with my dusting. I never said a word about it?to the kids or my husband.

作者心理活動(dòng)：掩飾

By now we had named the dog. It looked like a Molly, so that was what we called it. It followed the girls everywhere they went. When they went outside, it was one step behind them. When they did housework, it was there to lend a hand. 狗和家人關(guān)系融洽（反襯）

描述心理活動(dòng)的寫(xiě)法

1?直接使用情感詞匯 I?am happy.

2?使用表述情感的短語(yǔ)或句型

My?face?lit up like a Christmas tree.

Joy danced all the way to my heart.

3?如實(shí)寫(xiě)出內(nèi)心的真實(shí)想法

4?通過(guò)周圍環(huán)境或人物動(dòng)作進(jìn)行反襯

There was only one problem with this otherwise perfect picture: my conscience (良心) was bothering me. I knew in my heart?I had to call that number and see if our Molly was the dog they were desperately seeking. It was the most difficult thing I’ve ever done.

作者心理活動(dòng)：良心煎熬、抉擇

With mixed feelings, I finally picked up the phone. How?I wish?there would be?no one to answer, or someone would just say?the dog had already been found.?But none of these happened.?On the other end was a voice of a middle-aged woman, who listened to my description of the dog and immediately offered to come over.?During the conversation,?Molly sat quietly at my side, rubbing my waist with its tiny warm body.?It was only less than 30 minutes before the doorbell rang, but to me it seemed to last a century.?I opened the door and my worry?was standing right in front of me.

I asked the woman to come in and she quickly bent over?and hugged Molly tightly.?The dog?hesitated for a second, then it started wagging its tail and barking excitedly as if it had recognized someone familiar.?My heart sank.?It was just like my worst nightmare coming into reality?that Molly did belong to that woman. She offered to give me some cash as a reward, but I refused. Actually I would very much like to pay a good sum of money to keep Molly instead. The?woman?appreciated once again and took Molly away, leaving me alone in this empty and unfamiliar house.

作者不想還 — 必須還 — 郁悶

把人不能解決的問(wèn)題交給狗去解決：是否合理？

女人把狗送給我們了：是否合理？

第五節(jié)課

2021年蘇錫常鎮(zhèn)二模續(xù)寫(xiě)

I was still a thief when I met Anil. And though only 15, I was an experienced and fairly successful hand.

人物： 我——盜賊 15

Anil——作家 25

Anil was about 25 – a tall, thin?fellow – and he looked easy-going, kind and simple?enough for my purpose. I might be able to get into his confidence.

I gave him my most appealing smile. “I want to work for you.” I said.

“But I can’t pay you.”

Perhaps I had misjudged the man. I asked, “Can you feed me?”

“Can you cook?”

“I can cook.” I lied.

“If you can cook, then I can feed you.”

The meal I cooked that night must have been terrible because Anil gave it to a stray dog and told me to be off. But I just hung around smiling in my most appealing way, and he couldn’t help laughing.

Later he patted me on the head and said never mind, he’d teach me to cook. He also taught me to write my name and said he would soon teach me to write whole sentences and to add numbers. I was grateful. I knew that once I could write like an educated man there would be no limit to what I could achieve.

One evening he came home with a small bundle of notes（鈔票）, saying he had just sold a book to a publisher. At night, I saw him put the money under the mattress (床墊).

It’s time I did some real work, I told myself. After all, he doesn’t even pay me.

續(xù)寫(xiě)：重點(diǎn)關(guān)注文章里的重復(fù)信息

Anil was asleep. I crept up to the bed. Anil was sleeping peacefully. My hand slid under the mattress, searching for the notes. When I found them, I drew them out without a sound. Anil sighed in his sleep and turned on his side, towards me. I was frightened and quickly crawled out of the room.

作家知不知道我在偷錢(qián)？

知道—沒(méi)有制止我—為什么？—有信心、善良—改變

不知道—情節(jié)如何發(fā)展？

續(xù)寫(xiě)：當(dāng)情節(jié)出現(xiàn)分支選擇時(shí)，重點(diǎn)關(guān)注故事性塑造

I began to run, holding the notes?by the string of my pajamas (睡衣). But I slowed down and sat down in the shelter of the clock tower. I should go back to Anil, I told myself, if only to learn to read and write. 醒悟

I hurried back to the room feeling very nervous.心理

In?my thief career, it was the first time I returned something I had stolen.?心理出現(xiàn)的原因

I opened the door quietly. 動(dòng)作 實(shí)寫(xiě)

With?the moonlight through the window, I could see Anil was still sleeping. 環(huán)境描寫(xiě) 烘托氣氛 虛寫(xiě)

I crept up to the bed and slid my hand under the mattress again. 動(dòng)作 實(shí)寫(xiě)

The room was deadly silent as if?I could hear his breath. 環(huán)境描寫(xiě) 烘托氣氛 虛寫(xiě)

I bit my lip and put the notes back, 動(dòng)作 實(shí)寫(xiě)

feeling?his gentle eyes were staring at me all the time, but?he didn’t. 感受 環(huán)境 虛寫(xiě)

“單人連續(xù)動(dòng)作+心理活動(dòng)”寫(xiě)作方法

續(xù)寫(xiě)：寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容四大類—?jiǎng)幼?、情感、環(huán)境、言語(yǔ)

續(xù)寫(xiě)：連續(xù)動(dòng)作可以不連續(xù)寫(xiě)，動(dòng)作之間可以插入環(huán)境描述或情感描述

續(xù)寫(xiě)：寫(xiě)動(dòng)作用短句，寫(xiě)插入用長(zhǎng)句

我走進(jìn)房間

房間似乎和平時(shí)并沒(méi)有什么兩樣

拿起一本書(shū)

這本書(shū)我看過(guò)很多次了，但是這次的感覺(jué)有點(diǎn)不一樣

翻開(kāi)書(shū)的中間

讓我意外的是

發(fā)現(xiàn)一封信

I awoke late next morning to find that Anil had already made the tea. 視角：我

He asked me to sit across the table and handed me a white envelope. 視角：他

To my surprise, there was a $20 note?in it. 我

“This?is your weekly wage,” he voice echoed in my head, “Now you are a decent man with a formal job.”

他

I raised my head and met his easy-going, kind and simple?look in the eyes. At?that?moment,?something buried deeply in my heart awoke. I tried to say some words, but I failed. 我 最后一次

“Finish your breakfast and we will begin today’s class,” he said. 他 最后一次

兩方互動(dòng)的寫(xiě)作方法

續(xù)寫(xiě)：視角交替轉(zhuǎn)換，主角輪流出現(xiàn)

作家與我互動(dòng)

教育——難寫(xiě)/字?jǐn)?shù)不夠用

不教育——好寫(xiě)/可發(fā)揮空間大

續(xù)寫(xiě)：挑選簡(jiǎn)單的內(nèi)容來(lái)編寫(xiě)情節(jié)

全文呈現(xiàn)

I hurried back to the room feeling very nervous. In my thief career, it was the first time I returned something I had stolen. I opened the door quietly. With the moonlight through the window, I could see Anil was still sleeping. I crept up to the bed and slid my hand under the mattress again. The room was deadly silent as if I could hear his breath. I bit my lip and put the notes back, feeling his gentle eyes were staring at me all the time, but he didn’t.

I awoke late next morning to find that Anil had already made the tea.?He asked me to sit across the table and handed me a white envelope. To my surprise, there was a $20 note in it. “This is your weekly wage,” he voice echoed in my head, “Now you are a decent man with a formal job.” I raised my head and met his easy-going, kind and simple look in the eyes. At that moment, something buried deeply in my heart awoke. I tried to say some words, but I failed. “Finish your breakfast and we will begin today’s class,” he said.?

第六節(jié)課

2021年濰坊二模續(xù)寫(xiě)

I am a proud?mother of three children, my last little one being delivered in the middle of this pandemic. She was born in August and her name is Aida.

Shortly after having Aida, my mother-in-law Ann showed me something she learned from her friend’s mother in an art class she attended weekly. She had showed me how to knit (編織) a scarf. She showed me stitches (針) and gave me her half done project.

I spent a lot of time breastfeeding my sweet little girl, so I had some extra time to do something with my hands throughout the day. I enjoyed making the scarf?so I purchased tons of yarn (線) since it was winter. I wanted to make scarves?for my three children as Christmas gifts. 背景

There was a new family that moved in down the street. The only daughter of the family was Jane, a shy girl, aged 14, the same age of my oldest son David. It seemed that she came from a financially disadvantaged family, for she always wore old clothes. Worse still, in such cold days, she had no more clothes to wear and trembled with cold. 問(wèn)題

Due to the pandemic, society was thrown into crisis mode. Schools were closed, food supplies and deliveries were suspended and children were stuck at home. In such discouraging times, however, they became good companions, talking and playing at home or around the houses. 友誼

It was dreadfully cold this winter. Every time David came back from outside, with red face, he always cried, “Mum, it is freezing outside!” Then, he came over to see whether I finished the scarf. I could tell how impatient he was to wear my scarf?sooner! I had to speed the project to satisfy his expectation. But?David comforted?me saying he could wait a few days. What a kind and considerate?boy he was! Then my great art project finally was accomplished on the morning ahead of Christmas.

我：三個(gè)孩子的母親 做圍巾 proud?

Jane：鄰居家的女兒?窮 冷 shy

David：我的大兒子 Jane的朋友 kind?/ considerate

Ann：我的岳母 教我織圍巾

Aida：我的小女兒 剛出生

我——David——Jane

I wrapped the scarf around David’s neck.

His?eyes widened with joy?and his face lit up like a Christmas tree.

表情 眼神 — 抽象

“Thank you, Mom”, he gave me a big hug?and kissed me on the cheek, “This is the best Christmas gift I’ve ever received!”?

言語(yǔ) 動(dòng)作 — 具體

Then he couldn’t wait to go outside and show off his new scarf. 情節(jié)發(fā)展

I was relieved and satisfied, not?just because?I finished my project, but because?I was truly able to bring happiness to the children in such depressing times. 心理活動(dòng)+原因 由表及里

孩子表現(xiàn) — 說(shuō)話、表情、眼神、肢體動(dòng)作（禁止寫(xiě)心理活動(dòng)）

母親心理 — 心理活動(dòng)（寫(xiě)作方法）

孩子舉動(dòng) — 出去

Later that day David came back saying Jane also deserved a scarf.

He seemed to bear something in mind but was hesitated to speak out,?so I encouraged him to share his thought with me. 情節(jié)發(fā)展

“Can I give this scarf to Jane? She really needs it.” he murmured. 孩子言語(yǔ)

I nodded to him and told him I was very proud to have a boy like him who truly cared for others. 我的回應(yīng)

Getting my approval, David excitedly rushed out to find Jane, while I picked up the stitches and yarn again. 孩子舉動(dòng)+我的舉動(dòng)

“Three scarves to go,” I thought, feeling a warmth inside. 我的心理活動(dòng)

我 David

織圍巾 期待

給他戴圍巾 感謝

鼓勵(lì)他說(shuō)出來(lái) 有心事

贊同肯定 要送別

繼續(xù)織圍巾 跑出去送

驕傲、溫暖

全文呈現(xiàn)

I wrapped the scarf around David’s neck. His eyes widened with joy and his face lit up like a Christmas tree. “Thank you, Mom”, he gave me a big hug and kissed me on the cheek, “This is the best Christmas gift I’ve ever received!” Then he couldn’t wait to go outside and show off his new scarf. I was relieved and satisfied, not just because I finished my project, but because I was truly able to bring happiness to the children in such depressing times.?

Later that day David came back saying Jane also deserved a scarf.?He seemed to bear something in mind but was hesitated to speak out, so I encouraged him to share his thought with me. “Can I give this scarf to Jane? She really needs it.” he murmured. I nodded to him and told him I was very proud to have a boy like him who truly cared for others. Getting my approval, David excitedly rushed out to find Jane, while I picked up the stitches and yarn again. “Three scarves to go,” I thought, feeling a warmth inside.

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