雅思小作文兩個寫作 第二個是我對官方6分作文的修改
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示例1
The two maps illustrate the developing planning of an industrial zone in the town of Norbiton.
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It is clear that there are two main differences between these two maps, main function and the size of area.
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Looking at the information in more detail, the main function in this site now is manufactory. There are eight factories lying alongside the main road. Farmland is the only type of land usage north of the river. By contrast, the main function of land planned in the future for housing as well as living. There are six housing areas in the center area along the main road and one housing used land north of the river. What’ more, there are several facility sites for dwellers’ living, such as shops, medical centre, playground and schools.
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With the development of the site, more roads are constructed, and the urban used land is growing along these roads. However, the farmland is smaller than now, which leaving about half of the size in the first map in the northeast of the site.
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示例2
TEST 1, WRITING TASK 1 This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6.0 score.
已修訂,應(yīng)該可以上7。改到后邊真的改不動了。
The two maps illustrate the Norbiton area in the present days, as well as, the planned development.
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Overall, the Norbiton industrial area is located at the east side of the town, with a river on the north, separating the farmland from the industrial area.如果這樣下去第一段就只有一句話了There is a roundabout with two entrances in the center of this area. Three factories scatte around the roundabout as well as another five factories lie alongside both sides of a road with an access on the east side of the roundabout. What’ more, another entrance of the roundabout is on its sound side which connect with the main road by a short road.
The second map with the planned development shows a substantially growth and modifications of the overall infrastructure of in this area between the farmland and the main road. factories are replace for housings. Moreover, the roads have been developed to accomodate all the new buildings that have been planned for the area, which are, a school and a playground to the east side of the roundabout located in the center of the map, as well as shops and a medical center around the roundabout. a bridge is planned for the north of the map to cross the river and provide access to the housing that will be located in the west part of original farmland.