一、評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)（主要從內(nèi)容、語言表達(dá)、篇章結(jié)構(gòu)）

1.完整性，連貫性

2.詞匯，語法的準(zhǔn)確性、恰當(dāng)性 、多樣性（一類文）

二、寫作SOP

1.閱讀文章

2.梳理結(jié)構(gòu)（把文章脈絡(luò)講清楚）

(1)確認(rèn)文段主體結(jié)構(gòu)

情緒：消極情緒

轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)：事情似乎有了轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)，并抱有希望，感到欣慰

失望：事情有了轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)，但是出現(xiàn)了新問題

結(jié)局：事情有了最后的轉(zhuǎn)折（結(jié)局要好）

總結(jié)：點(diǎn)題，呼應(yīng)前文

從負(fù)能量（消極）→正能量（積極）

(2)簡要提綱

Theme 勵(lì)志--戰(zhàn)勝困難

他糾結(jié)痛苦。

他決定參加。

他最終跑完。

這三句話一定不要出錯(cuò)！

（3）確認(rèn)亮點(diǎn)

①環(huán)境描寫

一瞬間，一種令人室息的..席卷了(ruled)...，一陣強(qiáng)烈的+情緒+擊潰了sb.

Within a split second, a complete +n.+ruled the +環(huán)境+and a wave of +情緒n.+swept over sb.

（豐富詞匯）

Within a split second ,an absolute

helplessness ruled the space and a wave of terror swept over him.

②情感描寫

sb’s+心臟狂（fiercely ）跳 ,手掌出汗,內(nèi)心有一個(gè)堅(jiān)定的聲音告訴自己要......

Ones heart pounding fiercely and ones palm sweating, there seemed to be an inner voice telling sb firmly that

(獨(dú)立主格)

His heart pounding fiercely and his palm sweating, there seemed to be an inner voice telling him firmly that he had to finish the task.

③語言描寫

宛如放下了心中的大石頭，sb.感覺到了一絲情緒,他對(duì)sb說道As if a heavy weight had been lifted from one's mind, he sensed a glimmer of and saying to sb,"....."

As if a heavy weight had been lifted from his mind, he sensed a glimmer of hope and saying to me,"thank you for trusting me".

(虛擬語氣)

結(jié)尾

It clicked that he hurdled his fear and fulfilled his potential, and the unremitting effort was worth it.

Life isn't about waiting for the storm to pass, it's about learning to dance in the rain.（升華）