在最近的一篇專欄中，我為了滿足大家對(duì)于低價(jià)作文批改服務(wù)套餐的呼聲，推出了基于 ChatGPT 的作文批改 Mini 卡。然后我用了 46 篇以前改過的作文對(duì) ChatGPT 進(jìn)行調(diào)教，目前它已經(jīng)基本可以輸出可以接受的批改結(jié)果。當(dāng)然，有些中國學(xué)生特有的錯(cuò)誤，比如中式英語，胡亂替換，還得我進(jìn)行后期修正。

大家可以看看看批改效果，如果你覺得這個(gè)程度的批改已經(jīng)足夠令你滿意的話，歡迎聯(lián)系我購買 Mini 作文批改卡。價(jià)格和說明見上一篇專欄文章。

題目：

五月一日是國際勞動(dòng)節(jié)。假定你是學(xué)生會(huì)主席李華，請(qǐng)以“Labor Creates Happiness”為題，為校英文報(bào)寫一封倡議書，呼吁同學(xué)們過一個(gè)有意義的勞動(dòng)節(jié)，內(nèi)容包括: 1.勞動(dòng)的意義; 2.具體建議 (至少兩條) ; 3.發(fā)出呼吁

原文：

As the Labor Day approaches, we are appealing to all of you to engage in laboring and create happiness to others and yourselves.

It's well-known that labor not only bring out happiness and wealth, but produce knowledge and experience. By doing labor, we develop our sense of social responsibility and have valuable insight into working. So as to have an enlightening Labor Day, it always comes first to participate in the family chores and volunteer services in community. You are also encouraged to learn more labor skills that you take an interest in, including cooking and repairing electrical devices, which will definitely benefit you in the future.

Happiness is attained though hard work. Only by labor together can we achieve bright lives.

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修改版：

As Labor Day approaches, we appeal to all of you to engage in labor and create happiness for both others and yourselves.

It is well-known that labor not only brings happiness and wealth but also produces knowledge and experience. Through labor, we develop a sense of social responsibility and gain valuable insights into work. To have an enlightening Labor Day, it is important to prioritize participating in family chores and engaging in volunteer services within the community. You are also encouraged to learn more labor skills that you are interested in, such as cooking and repairing electrical devices, which will undoubtedly benefit you in the future.

Happiness is achieved through hard work. Only by working together can we create brighter lives.

批改：?

"appealing to all of you to engage in laboring" should be "appealing to all of you to engage in labor."

解釋："engage in labor" 更直接地表示參與勞動(dòng)的行為，而不是以動(dòng)名詞形式。

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"engage in laboring" 應(yīng)改為 "engage in labor"。

解釋：動(dòng)詞 "labor" 表示參與勞動(dòng)的意思，無需在后面添加 "-ing"。

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"bring out happiness and wealth" 應(yīng)改為 "bring happiness and wealth"。

解釋：動(dòng)詞 "bring" 在這里表示帶來的意思，后面直接接名詞 "happiness" 和 "wealth"，無需使用 "out"。

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"produce knowledge and experience" should be "generate knowledge and experience."

解釋：在教育和學(xué)習(xí)的背景下，我們通常使用 "generate" 來描述知識(shí)和經(jīng)驗(yàn)的產(chǎn)生，即通過學(xué)習(xí)、實(shí)踐或參與活動(dòng)而獲得新的知識(shí)和經(jīng)驗(yàn)。

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"By doing labor" 應(yīng)改為 "Through labor"。

解釋："By doing labor" 表示通過參與勞動(dòng)的方式，而 "Through labor" 更準(zhǔn)確地表示通過勞動(dòng)的過程。

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"develop our sense of social responsibility and have valuable insight into working" should be "develop our sense of social responsibility and gain valuable insights into work."

解釋："have valuable insight into working" 表達(dá)了對(duì)工作的寶貴見解，但在語境中可能有些不準(zhǔn)確。"gain valuable insights into work" 則更直接地表明了對(duì)工作的寶貴見解的獲得。

"insight" 這個(gè)詞在這里使用時(shí)應(yīng)該是復(fù)數(shù)形式 "insights"，以表示多個(gè)寶貴的見解。

"into working" 表達(dá)了對(duì)工作本身的見解，但使用 "into work" 更準(zhǔn)確地表示對(duì)工作的見解。

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"So as to have an enlightening Labor Day" 應(yīng)改為 "To have an enlightening Labor Day"。

解釋："So as to" 可以簡化為 "To"，表達(dá)為了度過有意義的勞動(dòng)節(jié)的意思。

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" to participate in the family chores" should be "to prioritize participating in family chores."

解釋："to participate in the family chores" 中的 "to" 之前可以使用 "prioritize"，以強(qiáng)調(diào)將家務(wù)勞動(dòng)放在首位，即優(yōu)先考慮家務(wù)勞動(dòng)的重要性。

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" volunteer services in community" 應(yīng)改為 "volunteer services within the community"。

解釋： "in community" 應(yīng)改為 "within the community"，表示在社區(qū)內(nèi)進(jìn)行志愿服務(wù)的意思。

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"learn more labor skills" can be improved to "acquire additional practical skills."

解釋："learn more labor skills" 表達(dá)了獲取更多勞動(dòng)技能的意愿，但可能略顯籠統(tǒng)。"acquire additional practical skills" 則更具體地指出獲取額外的實(shí)用技能。

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"that you take an interest in" 應(yīng)改為 " that interest you"。

解釋："that you take an interest in" 可以改為 "that interest you"，表示對(duì)你感興趣的勞動(dòng)技能。

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"Happiness is attained though hard work" 應(yīng)改為 "Happiness is achieved through hard work"。

解釋："attained" 應(yīng)改為 "achieved"，表示通過辛勤工作獲得幸福的意思。though拼寫錯(cuò)誤

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"Only by labor together can we achieve bright lives" 應(yīng)改為 "Only by working together can we achieve bright lives"。

解釋："by labor together" 應(yīng)改為 "by working together"，表示只有共同努力才能實(shí)現(xiàn)更美好生活的意思。