升本英語作文

Along with隨著the development of society，mo1re and more越來越people take part in 參加the part-time jobs.--扣題，老師能讀下去

You know，it is very good.I would like to take part in.because it is good.Why it is good？(不能用good這么低級(jí)的詞)First，I think that it help we very much，Second，we can relax and make friend.In the end，we also study many things from it，so it is very important.

Do you think so？

7分作文原因：內(nèi)容基本切題，語句可以理解，但有較多的句子和用詞錯(cuò)誤，文章長度未達(dá)到要求，沒有清楚地傳達(dá)信息給讀者

19分

高分四秀

• 1.秀萬能理由
• 2.秀邏輯（萬能理由的連接詞）
• 3.秀高分句到
• 4.秀首尾（開頭句+結(jié)尾句）

（首段）Now we are entering進(jìn)入a new era時(shí)代full of 充滿（adj短語做后置定語修飾 era）opportunities機(jī)會(huì)and innovations創(chuàng)新，革新 and great changes改變 have taken place發(fā)生in在.方面people's attitude towards對(duì)待.態(tài)度some traditional 傳統(tǒng)的views觀點(diǎn).one of which is其中之一是taking part-time job（套題目），To this issue問題，different people come up with 提出various opinions觀點(diǎn).

（主體段）It is widely believed that 大家普遍認(rèn)為taking part-time jobs certainly brings about several advantages 優(yōu)點(diǎn).First and foremost，（邏輯）students can learn how to get along with與某人相處 people and know了解 the society better；（萬能理由）what's more，（邏輯）to take a part-time job provides the students with a valuable珍貴的 opportunity to put what he has learned from books into practice把某事付諸于實(shí)踐；（萬能理由+高分句型）last but not least，

（邏輯）students can make some money，which helps to unload減輕 their families'financial 經(jīng)濟(jì)burden負(fù)擔(dān).（萬能理由+高分句型）That is why they have the above conclusion 結(jié)論.

（主體段）There is a good side and a bad side to everything，it goes without saying that不言而喻 it is no exception例外.For one thing，（邏輯）some students spend 花費(fèi)too much time doing part-time jobs while 然而neglecting忽略 their studies；（萬能理由）for another thing，（邏輯）when taking part-time jobs，the students may be distracted from轉(zhuǎn)移注意力 their studies by通過the colorful lives in the society.（萬能理由+高分句型）Therefore因此 they hold it is a curse 觀點(diǎn).

（尾段）As far as I am/we are/he is concerned就我而言，taking account all of 把..考慮進(jìn)內(nèi) the above factors因素，we should face it more reasonably 合理地，only in this way can we benefit from從中獲益it

寫作步驟

• 1.審題2min（看懂題目+還要去想一想這個(gè)題目適合哪種作文題材，適合套哪種模板）
• 2.草擬提綱3--5min（打草稿-默寫模板）
• 3.正文寫作21---23min（模板+題目靈活結(jié)合）
• 4.檢查，修改4min（檢查自己寫的句子）

走入寫作

一.要求

• 1.字?jǐn)?shù)：hoo/120（120-150）
• 2.內(nèi)容：切題、準(zhǔn)確（圍繞題目）
• 3.格式：3-4段

二.作文題材

• 1.議論文（拿社會(huì)上的一個(gè)話題進(jìn)行討論）：社會(huì)熱點(diǎn)（針對(duì)一個(gè)純好/純壞的而一個(gè)而話題進(jìn)行分析）+觀點(diǎn)對(duì)比（有好有壞針對(duì)一個(gè)話題，人們觀點(diǎn)不一樣）

Creating 創(chuàng)造a Green Campus校園（社熱）/part-time jobs/online learning

Certificate證書 Craze瘋狂 on Campus考證熱（社熱）/Lifelong Learning終身學(xué)習(xí)（對(duì)）

• 2.書信（申請(qǐng)信/建議信/邀情信）
• 3.圖畫（通過現(xiàn)象看本質(zhì)）
• 4.名言警句（practice makes perfect--熟能生巧）
• 5.寫人敘述類（A meaningful Volunteer 志愿Activity）

議論文

社會(huì)熱點(diǎn)型（好/壞）

出題類型：why 型/how型

Why型

一、出題思路：

1. .xx現(xiàn)象越來越流行，普遍，重要
2. .分析原因
3. .我的看法

二、寫作思路：

第一段.引題段（描述現(xiàn)象）

1（句）引起評(píng)論對(duì)象

2（句）對(duì)現(xiàn)象進(jìn)行描述

第二段.主體（分析原因）--重頭戲

1（句）過渡句

2-5（句）邏輯連接詞+萬能理由2-3個(gè)+高分句型

第三段.結(jié)論

好事預(yù)測(cè)未來趨勢(shì)，

壞事給出建議措施

Now we are entering a new era full of opportunities and innovations and great changes have taken place in people's attitude towards some traditional views.one of which is——題目—

what are the reasons for it？ln the following接下來的 paragraphs/contents內(nèi)容.I will explore探索 them.In the first place，——+理由1+高分句子——.In the second place，——+理由2+高分句子——.In the last place，+理由3+高分句型.Consequently因此，--題目--is so heated有熱度的！

In a word總而言之，the whole整個(gè) society should pay close親密的attention to密切關(guān)注 the topic of題目Only in this way can we have a better future.（好）

/With隨著the development of society，-——題目——needs our attention.So it"s urgent緊急的and necessary必要的 to solve解決it.If every member 成員is willing to 樂意做某事contribute himself to貢獻(xiàn)，促成the society，it will be better and better.（壞）

萬能理由（參考）

1.成就感（achievement）

關(guān)鍵詞：

a sense of achievement 成就感

grand feat 輝煌的業(yè)績

elevate our self-esteem有助于自我實(shí)現(xiàn)

關(guān)鍵句：

By doing（-attending university 上大學(xué)）.…，we can enjoy a sense of achievement，which（定從，去修飾achievement）will（inevitably）elevate our self-esteem.

通過做…，我們能夠獲得一種成就感，這不可避免地能有助自我實(shí)現(xiàn)

2.溝通（communication）

關(guān)鍵詞：

people skil人際交往能力

bare one's heart 敞開心扉

關(guān)鍵句：

Through/by 通過——，we are able to=can obtain=get harmony和諧of the communication（n+of +the=adj），which（定語從句）can reduce減少the conflict矛盾，沖突and help us bare our heart and make more friends交朋友.

3.健康（health）

關(guān)鍵詞：

factors to sound health健康的要素

contribute to 貢獻(xiàn)，促成physical身體上的health有助于身體健康關(guān)鍵句：

...is a necessary必要 factor to keep health 保持健康.Anyway無論如何，health 健康is above wealth 財(cái)富，we should discard 摒棄unhealthy habits 習(xí)慣in order to為了have a better life.

4.娛樂entertainment/creation/leisure

——題目——is a relaxing放松的 way/means方式 to fill 填充my leisure time

.…是填充我休閑時(shí)光的一種放松方式

Among milons of 大量--——，you can always find something（that）you are interested in.

在.中，你總能夠找到你感興趣的那些事情

5.知識(shí)

knowledge information信息 experience經(jīng)驗(yàn)skill技能

————is the main/major source of social information

…是社會(huì)的主要信息來源

We are able to get/acquire/gain/obtain獲得 more knowledge through/from/by通過——will certainly/undoubtedly無疑broaden our view開闊視野，enrich 豐富 our life and deepen加深 the understanding理解 of the society

6.心理健康health/positive積極的

————will relieve/reduce減輕people's stress/pressure壓力 and make people（totally）徹底地feel relaxed 。We can adjust oneself to 調(diào)整。。。以適應(yīng)new environment環(huán)境and face 面對(duì)challenge 挑戰(zhàn)confidently自信地by通過——

7.環(huán)境

environment/traffic 交通

protect保護(hù)/pollute污染

___pose a great threat構(gòu)成嚴(yán)重威脅to our living生存environment In order to為了maintain維持ecological生態(tài)的balance平衡，our environment awareness 意識(shí)should be enhanced增強(qiáng)，提高

8.人際relationship/friends

We can make a lot of friends from different background 來自不同背景的by通過___

邏輯詞

1.First of all，moreover/furthermore，in the end

2.In the first place，in the second place，in the third place

3.First and foremost，what's more/worse，last but not least

4.On the one hand，on the other hand兩個(gè)理由

5.For one thing，for another thing

高分句型

一.比較級(jí)

1.越來越

More and more..

eg. more and more people go to work by bike

練習(xí)：空氣污染變得越來越嚴(yán)重了

Air pollution becomes more and more serious.

2.沒有什么比.…更…

nothing is+比較級(jí)+than+n/to do/doing sth

eg:Nothing is better than money.

Nothing is more comfortable than to stay at home

練習(xí)：沒有什么比學(xué)習(xí)更重要的了

Nothing is more important than to study.

沒有什么比網(wǎng)絡(luò)學(xué)習(xí)更方便的了。

Nothing is more convenient than to study on the line/internet.

3.越….越…

The+比較級(jí)+主謂，the+比較級(jí)+主謂

越努力，越幸運(yùn)

The harder we are，the luckier we will be.

學(xué)生們參加的兼職工作越多，他們獲得的經(jīng)驗(yàn)也就越多

The more part-time jobs students take part in，the more experience they will get.

二.倒裝

1.only in this way can sb do只有以這種方式.…才能…

eg:only in this way can we study English well

練習(xí)：只有以這種方式我們才能解決這個(gè)問題

Only in this way can we solve this problem

2.by no means/in no case/in no way/at no time+can sb do 某人絕對(duì)

不可以做…

eg:By no means can children be allowed to smoke

練習(xí)：人們是絕對(duì)不可以污染環(huán)境的

At no time can people pollute the environment.

我們是絕對(duì)不可以浪費(fèi)教育資源的。

In no case can we waste the educational resource

三.強(qiáng)調(diào)句

It is+被強(qiáng)調(diào)部分+that（萬能）/who（人+其他正是...怎么樣

注意：被強(qiáng)調(diào)部分除了不能是動(dòng)詞以外，其余都可以！

eg:I learn English in this room every day.

It is in this room that I learn English every day

練習(xí)：正是吸煙對(duì)我們的健康造成了損害

-正常句子 smoking is harmful to our health.

It is smoking that is harmful to our health.

正是網(wǎng)絡(luò)購物給我們帶來了便利

Online shopping brings us convenience

-it is online shopping that brings us convenience。

四.it句型

1.it is widely/generally/commonly廣泛地accepted接受/acknowledged承認(rèn)/believed認(rèn)為that..大家普遍認(rèn)為…

eg:it is widely accepted that walking is good for 對(duì)..有好處our health

練習(xí)：大家普遍認(rèn)為通過終身學(xué)習(xí)我們能夠獲得很多好處

It is generally acknowledged that we can get/obtain/acquire a lot of benefits/advantages through/by lifelong learning.

大家普遍認(rèn)為吃太多的快餐會(huì)造成疾病

It is commonly accepted that eating too much fast food will cause illness.

2.it/sth cannot be overemphasized

無論如何強(qiáng)調(diào).…都不為過

eg:The importance of traffic safety cannot be overemphasized

練習(xí)：無論如何強(qiáng)調(diào)安全都不為過

The safety cannot be overemphasized.

無論如何強(qiáng)調(diào)環(huán)境問題都不為過

The problem/issue of environment cannot be overemphasized

3.It goes without saying that..…

（It is）needless to say（that）…

不用說/不言而喻

eg:It goes without saying that it is worth keeping early hours早起for us.

不言而喻上大學(xué)（主語）在我們的成長（時(shí)間狀語-放最后）中扮演（動(dòng)

詞）著重要的角色（賓語）。

It is needless to say that attending a university plays an important role in our growing process.

五.非限制性定語從句

句子，which +v+其他

eg:Cars can save a lot of time，which is limited有限 and precious

注意：當(dāng)想用because時(shí)，替換成which.

練習(xí)：我們必須阻止污染，因?yàn)檫@對(duì)環(huán)境有好處（be good for）

We must stop/prevent/prohibit pollution，which is good for the living environment.

我們最好要堅(jiān)持練習(xí)，因?yàn)槭炷苌桑╩ake perfects）

We had better keep practice，which makes perfects

六.名詞性從句

1.定語從句+表語從句

The reason why+完整句子…is that+完整句子.什么的原

因是什么

eg:the reason why people prefer to愿意 study aboard出國留學(xué) is that they can experience different cultures

練習(xí)：我們努力學(xué)習(xí)的原因是為了上個(gè)好大學(xué)

The reason why we study hard is that we can/are able to attend a better

college.

練習(xí)：越來越多的學(xué)生找兼職工作的原因是這能夠幫助家里減輕負(fù)擔(dān)

The reason why more and more students find/take part in part-time jobs

is that they are able to help their family reduce burden