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環(huán)境 動作 情感

時間/地點/過渡, sb., with sth. in one's hand, doing B, did A, doing C, feeling / looking...

1??動作稍怎么辦

男孩跳入湖中嬉戲

• 沖向湖邊：rush to the lake
• 脫掉衣服：take off his clothes
• 跳入水中：jump into the water

Having taken off his clothes, the boy rushed to the lake and jumped into the water.

歌手唱歌

• 掃視觀眾：cast a glance at the audience
• 深吸一口氣：take a deep breath
• 開始演唱：begin to sing

After casting a glance at the audience, the singer took a deep breath and began to sing.

老人靜坐

• 坐在地鐵上：sit on the subway
• 盯著手機：stare at his phone
• 皺著眉頭：knit his brows / frown

Absorbed in reading, the man sat still on the subway, frowning.

2??拆解練習(xí)二

流暢三連：

• Sb. did A, did B and did C.

同時發(fā)生：

• Sb. did A, doing B and doing C.
• Doing B and C, sb. did A.

有先有后，有因有果

• （先/因）Having done A, sb. did B and C（后/果）.
• Sb did A and B, doing C（果）.
• After/Before doing A, sb. did B to do C（目的）

我要帶上最好的劍、翻過最高的山、闖入最深的森林、把公主帶回來

流暢三連

• l climbed over the highest mountain, found my way into the deep forest and brought back the princess.

同時發(fā)生

• Carrying the best sword, l went into the deep forest and brought the princess back.

有先有后，有因有果

• a. I climbed over the highest mountain and found my way intothe dense forest, bringing back the princess.
• b. After climbing over the highest mountain, l found my way into the dense forest to bring back the princess.

3??加情感

正面

• excited / thrilled（興奮的）
• joyful / overjoyed（快樂的，欣喜若狂的）
• amazed（驚訝的）
• delighted（高興的）
• satisfied（滿足的）

負面

• sacred（害怕的）
• worried（擔(dān)心的）
• ashamed（羞愧的）
• nervous（緊張的）
• depressed（沮喪的）

原因/伴隨

• Depressed and helpless, the princess cried out.

結(jié)果

• He finally found his way into the forest, exhausted but excited.

伴隨

• He brought back the princess, feeling proud and excited.

4??加個buff/工具

with sth. in one's hand

with sth. on one's head

with the help of sb.

with a smile on his/ her face

He climbed over the hill with a sword in his hand.

He, with the help of an elf（精靈）, saved the princess.

5??加過渡

（情緒）To one's surprise / delight / relief,…

Hopefully, / Obviously, / Of course,…

To our surprise, he brought back the princess.

表“時間、用時”

• 馬上：in no time, immediately
• 那一刻：at that moment / time / when / while / as
• 早/中/晚：early in the morning, in the late afternoon, the next / following morning

表“先后”

• 然后：(and) then, after that
• 不久：after a while, soon afterwards, shortly after, before long
• 最終：at last, in the end, finally, eventually

6??狀語串燒

Materials

• before long：時間
• into the forest：地點
• to our surprise：過渡
• with the help of an elf：工具
• feeing proud and excited：情緒

只要是狀語，在三個位置上，都符合語法要求。如：

• With a sword in his hand, the soldier entered the forest.
• The soldier, with a sword in his hand, entered the forest.
• The soldier entered the forest with a sword in his hand.

數(shù)量可增減，位置可變化

Mix it up !

To our surprise, he, with the help of an elf, savedour princess, feeling proud and excited.

Carrying the best sword, he eventually found hisway into the dense forest, exhausted but excited.

Before long, he, with the best sword in his hand, saved our princess, finding their way through the woods.

評分要點

• 細節(jié)刻畫意識
• 過渡銜接意識