Once children start school, teachers have more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

【題目翻譯】一旦孩子開始上學(xué)，老師對他們的智力和社交發(fā)展的影響比父母更大。你對這個(gè)說法在多大程度上同意或不同意？

【審題分析】

題目關(guān)鍵詞：孩子的智力/社交成長(child development)，家長or老師的影響

題目：to what extent agree or disagree

? 為了全面地回應(yīng)題干要求，在task response中拿到更高的分?jǐn)?shù)，我們要對題目進(jìn)行雙面討論，即闡述1）老師可能造成影響更大的原因；2）家長可能造成影響更大的原因，最后再下結(jié)論

第一段，引入段，改寫題目，介紹自己的觀點(diǎn)。

The development of children, including their academic progress and interpersonal skills, is a complex and collaborative process that involves both teachers and parents.?However, varying opinions exist on?the extent of influence each group has once children start school.?While some argue that teachers assume a more significant role, a comprehensive analysis of the factors shaping children’s growth may offer a different perspective.

第二段，讓步段，介紹老師可能造成更大影響的原因。這里需要??的是，因?yàn)轭}干提到了學(xué)術(shù)和社交兩方面的發(fā)展，我們的論述也需要cover這兩個(gè)方面，才能算是全面地回應(yīng)題干要求。

Undeniably, teachers exert substantial influence over children’s intellectual and social development.?School attendance means that children spend a considerable portion of their time in the classroom with their teachers. Compared to the limited time spent at home with parents outside of school hours or on weekends, this extended classroom interaction offers teachers more opportunities to impact their students.?Moreover, teachers are responsible for imparting knowledge and fostering positive behaviours through the establishment of a constructive and structured classroom environment. As the primary setting for students to acquire subject matter knowledge, interact with peers, and navigate social norms, the methods of instruction employed by teachers, coupled with the rules and expectations they set, inevitably shape children’s academic and social development.

第三段，反駁段，介紹家長仍然對孩子成長有很大影響的原因。同樣，我們也要從學(xué)術(shù)和社交兩個(gè)方面進(jìn)行闡述。

However, it would be hasty to conclude that teachers hold the predominant influence over children's development.?Parents can also exert a profound impact as they are a child’s first caregivers and educators, and they maintain a continuous presence throughout a child’s life. From a very young age and on a daily basis, parents may instill values, beliefs, habits, and cultural norms that lay the foundation for child’s later intellectual and social development.?Also, unlike teachers in the traditional classrooms, parents have the opportunity to provide individualized attention, tailoring their support and guidance to their child's unique needs and interests in both academic and social domains. Therefore, it is evident that parents also hold the primary role in shaping children’s development.

最后，總結(jié)段，總結(jié)我的觀點(diǎn)。

In conclusion, I firmly believe that both teachers and parents play equally indispensable roles in a child’s development, with their influences often synergizing to yield the most positive outcomes. Effective collaboration between these two influential groups can optimize a child’s growth and overall well-being, underscoring the importance of a unified approach to education. (355 words)