七七 | 讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)抓破頭？電影式萬(wàn)能結(jié)構(gòu)

1??讀什么

5W1H、主旨

確定主角

明確問(wèn)題

解決問(wèn)題

人與社會(huì)

人與自我

人與自然

2??續(xù)什么

情節(jié)

好故事來(lái)源于結(jié)構(gòu)

沖突

反應(yīng)

• 萬(wàn)能的情感線
• 變換的動(dòng)作線

嘗試

• 自身努力 或借助環(huán)境 / 工具
• 危機(jī)暫緩 或 嘗試失敗

轉(zhuǎn)折

• 靈機(jī)一動(dòng)
• 關(guān)鍵人 / 物

解決

反應(yīng)→嘗試→轉(zhuǎn)折→解決

But no helicopters came and it was qetting dark again.

①A wave of terror swept over her.

• sweep over：掃過(guò)
• 反應(yīng)：情感線

②Her heart pounding fiercely and her palm sweating, an inner voice told her that she had to find a safe place.

• v. 砰砰地跳
• 嘗試：自我鼓勵(lì)

③Tired and terrified as she was, Jane plucked her courage to feel the way.

• plucked her courage：鼓起勇氣
• 嘗試：危機(jī)暫緩

④Luckily, it didn't take long before she found a cave.

• 嘗試：危機(jī)暫緩

⑤Sighing with relief, she felt a glimmer of hope, saying to herself."Tomorrow is another day."

• a glimmer of hope：一絲希望
• 反應(yīng)：情感線

⑥With that, she went to sleep, in whose dream her husband kept her company.

• 銜接

lt was daybreak when Jane woke up.

①Hungry and disappointed, she found not any helicopter overhead, at a loss what to do.

• 反應(yīng)：情感線

②lt suddenly dawned on her that she should find a big open area first.

• 轉(zhuǎn)折：靈機(jī)一動(dòng)

③Having gobbling down some blackberries, she can't wait to set off.

• gobbling down：狼吞虎咽
• 轉(zhuǎn)折：關(guān)鍵事物

④After what seemed a century, such an area did come into sight.

• 反應(yīng)：情感線

⑤Her face brightened up.

• 反應(yīng)：情感線

⑥Meanwhile, a helicopter was flying towards her.

• 轉(zhuǎn)折：關(guān)鍵事物

⑦Upon its landing, out dashed her husband who hugged Jane tightly, tears welling up in their heart.

• dash：沖
• 解決

⑧l(xiāng)t was at the moment that they decided not to quarrel any more but learned to compromise.

• quarrel：v. 爭(zhēng)吵
• compromise：v. 妥協(xié)
• 點(diǎn)睛收尾

The car abruptly stopped in front of him.

①Seeing the car stop, Mac jumped off his bicycle immediately and rushed tothe door of the car.

• 銜接
• 反應(yīng)：Mac動(dòng)作線
• 嘗試：上車求援

②So frightened was he that he hardly said a whole sentence, but stammered,"the wolf, please let me in."

• stammer：v. 結(jié)結(jié)巴巴地說(shuō)
• 反應(yīng)：情感線

③Seeing the wolf running towards the car, Paul opened the door without any hesitation, pulling Mac into the car.

• 反應(yīng)：Paul動(dòng)作線
• 嘗試：危機(jī)暫緩

④Three men in the car were staring out of the window and saw the wolfstanding there, thinking how to fight back the wolf.

• stare out：向外凝視
• 銜接

A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived.

①About a hundred meters away, the two men stopped and realized what had happened to their friend.

• 銜接

②Being aware of the wolfs cruelty and not to startle the wolf, they were determinedto stay where they were and attempted to think out an idea.

• cruelty：n. 殘酷
• startle：v. 使受驚
• 反應(yīng)：動(dòng)作線

③suddenly, one of the cyclists touched the food bag which they brought.

• 轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)：關(guān)鍵人物

④Agood idea occurred to him that they could lead the wolf to the forest by throwing their beef and pork away.

• 轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)：靈機(jī)一動(dòng)

⑤Smelling the flavor of the meat, the wolf turned around and ran alongside the meat.

⑥The two cyclists u-turned in a crossroads.

• 解決！

⑦What comforted the two cyclists was that Mac did not get injured.

• comfort：安慰

⑧"Thank you tor stopping to save me, said Mac to paul and Becky.

• 自然結(jié)尾

⑨Mac and his two friends decided to go back home in case they would run into the wolf again.

3??續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容拆解

好故事來(lái)源于好結(jié)構(gòu)

Para 1

• 反應(yīng)：情感線 / 動(dòng)作線
• 嘗試：
• 自身 / 外在
• 暫緩 / 失敗
• 銜接：第二段首句

Para 2

• 反應(yīng) / 銜接
• 轉(zhuǎn)折 / 機(jī)
• 解決
• 點(diǎn)睛收尾

解決問(wèn)題第一步：拆解問(wèn)題

情緒描寫(xiě)

我害怕

• A wave of terror swept over her. Her heart pounding fiercely and her palm sweating, an inner voice told her that she had to find a safe place.

我命由我不由天

• 人定勝天
• sb. could hardly wait to do sth
• without hesitation / delay / a second thought / even thinking
• pluck / gather up one's courage to do sth
• 鼓起勇氣

天助我也

• To one's relief l surprise / delight，...
• 令某人欣慰/意外/開(kāi)心的是
• Strangely enough, it turned out that ...
• Luckily, it didn't take long before sb. ...

靈機(jī)一動(dòng)

• it做主語(yǔ)
• It suddenly occurred to sb. that...
• It struck sb. that...
• lt hit sb. that...
• It dawned on sb. that...
• 使開(kāi)始明白/理解
• 物做主語(yǔ)
• （A / An idea, thought..）occurred / came to sb. that...
• …came / flashed into one's mind.
• ... crowded in one's mind.

升華點(diǎn)睛

• 我悟了
• Not until then did sb. realize / notice that…
• It was not until then that sb. realized that…
• This special experience in ... made me realize that...
• 妙啊
• What a / an valuable / useful / great / painful lesson sb. taught me！
• sb. learned from sb！
• What a / an thrilling / pleasant / unforgettable / memorable experience sb had！

Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.

①lnstinctively, l yelled out loud, pulling back the reins hard in order to stop the horse from hurting the little creature.

• lnstinctively adv. 本能地
• reins n. 韁繩
• 我的反應(yīng)：動(dòng)作線

②Badly startled by the sudden incident, the horse sped off the track into another direction.

• sped v. 加速，飛馳
• 馬的反應(yīng)：動(dòng)作線

③Dad followed closely behind, calling out to tell me how to soothe（安慰）the terrified horse and l did as told.

• 爸爸的反應(yīng)：動(dòng)作線

④Finally, the horse calmed down, but we seemed to get lost, unable to go back to the mountain road.

• 嘗試：危機(jī)暫緩
• 銜接

We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.

①Wandering around, we were still stuck in the dilemma.

• dilemma n. 困境
• 銜接

②Much to our delight, the sound of water in the distance caught our attention and drove us to the riverbank.

• 轉(zhuǎn)折：關(guān)鍵事物

③Dad proposed that we should walk along the river which may lead us to the farm house and nothing seemed better than that.

• propose v. 提議，建議
• 轉(zhuǎn)折：靈機(jī)一動(dòng)

④Time appeared to be merrier and shorter when l stayed together with Dad and before long, the farm house came into sight.

• 解決

⑤What a thrilling but memorable experience it was!

• thrill v. 激動(dòng)人心的
• 點(diǎn)睛收尾

4??寫(xiě)什么

先寫(xiě)對(duì)：簡(jiǎn)單中文→英式中文→正確英文

再寫(xiě)美：詞的升級(jí)→句式的升級(jí)