The line graph and bar chart give the information about the vehicle numbers

and C02 emission in England and Wales between 2000 and 2020.

Your response

The two graphs illustrate the number of vehicles and the amount of CO2 emission in England and Wales from 2000 to 2020. It is clear that vehicle numbers showed a constant increase in that time,?

with

the fact that?

and?

cars always generated the largest amount of?

pollutants

?CO2.

According to the line graph, we can see that there were 20 million vehicles in England and Wales

?

in 2000

, and

?the

this

?figure rose

?

stably

steadily

?

to approximately 35 million in 2010. In the next stage, between 2010 and 2020, England and Wales saw a faster increase

of

in the

vehicle number than

that

happened in?

the?

former

previous?

10 years, reaching above 60 million in 2020.

Looking at the bar chart, it is obvious that the largest proportion of gas emission came from cars during the period

, rising

?from roughly 2.3 tonnes in 2000 to 3 tonnes in 2020. CO2 generation from trucks remained not only the second highest, but also?

witnessed?

a stable increase during the whole period in that area. The amount of?

polluted

CO2

?gas from?

the

?vans showed an increase

in the?

former

first?

10 years, but a drop in the

?

latter

second decade

, with a peak of about 0.7 tonnes in 2010. Buses generated the least amount of CO2 emission

,

?with all the figures below 0.5 tonnes.

Feedback

Task Achievement

The writer dealt with the requirements of the task, but the overview was not clear enough for a Band 7 overview (see comment box). To get a Band 7, there would need to be a clear overview.

Coherence and Cohesion

The writer arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are used effectively, but referencing within sentences may be faulty, for example (

The amount of polluted gas from

the

?vans showed an increase in the?

former

first?

10 years but a drop in the?

latter second decade

,?with a peak of about 0.7 tonnes in 2010

). For the candidate to attain a Band 7 in this criterion, there would need to be more accurate referencing.

Vocabulary

The writing uses a sufficientrange of vocabulary to communicate the issues with some flexibility and precision. Less common items are demonstrated with some use of collocation and style (

Buses generated the least amount of CO2 emission, with all the figures below 0.5 tonnes

). There are occasional errors in word choice (

it is obvious that the largest proportion of gas emission came from cars during the period

, rising

?from roughly 2.3 tonnes in 2000 to 3 tonnes in 2020. CO2 generation from trucks remained not only the second highest, but also?

witnessed

?a stable increase during the whole period

). In order to achieve a Band 8, there would need to be more range and accuracy of the vocabulary displayed.

Grammar

The writing displays a mix of simple sentences and complex sentence forms (sentences with a dependent clause) For example, (

According to the line graph, we can see that there were 20 million vehicles in England and Wales

in 2000,

and?

the

this

?figure rose?

stably

steadily

?to approximately 35 million in 2010

). In order to achieve a Band 7, there would need to be frequent error free sentences with more accuracy in the complex sentences.

Sample Answer

The line graph shows us the total vehicles on the roads in the UK and Wales over a 20-year period while the bar chart shows us the amount of C02 emissions from four different types of vehicles in three different years. Overall, while the total number of vehicles increased, the CO2 emitted increased from all vehicles. As previously stated, the total amount of vehicles increased over the period. Over the duration of the first 10 years, the vehicle number increased consistently by 75%. There were 20 million on the roads in the year 2000, but this number stood at 35 million by 2010. During the following decade, the numbers continued to increase but at a faster rate, rising from 35 million to just over 60 million in 2020. This turned out to be three times the number of vehicles that were on the road in 2000. There were differences in the C02 emitted between vehicles as well as changes over the two decades. First of all, cars emitted by far the most C02 each year. This started at around 2.25 tonnes in 2000 and increased to about 2.6 tonnes in 2010 and finished at 3 tonnes in 2020. This was well over double the total produced by buses, vans and trucks. These remaining three types of vehicles all produced around 0.5 tonnes of C02 in 2000. These numbers marginally rose in 2010 but were still all under the 1-tonne mark. Finally, buses had a sharp increase to around 1.25 tonnes in 2020 from its 2010 number, which was still well under half the amount as cars while both vans and trucks showed very little change.